Draculas

Jeff? Work for you?

Joe

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Yep, that completely works.

Are we going to add a disclaimer to the book saying that people who read the free sample are required to start over from the begi

Jeff

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Please, take a crack at sanding out the rough edges. What I really love (and maybe you work on) is the idea that because Mort is from this bloodline, and because he essentially infected himself with the same strand that hit Oswald, the virus can manifest differently in him. He contains the cure within himself, only it's a cure that makes him a functioning (and infinitely more terrifying dracula). This is getting above my medical expertise pay grade, so hopefully Paul can make sure I haven't completely fucked up my basic understanding of virus and antibody. And yes, Paul, I think the scene definitely goes on with Clay saying "You mean a shot?" Please feel free to tweak any of the dialogue I assigned to him.

Blake

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I uploaded a couple of pages of Clay 5.0 -- a scene done purely for visual impact -- but I don't know where to go from there. Does Clay reco

Maybe I'll write him setting up Adam's farewell scene and work on the timing and co

Paul

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Paul - I'm writing my Adam scene right now. Not sure if he co

Blake

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Let me see what you do and I'll jump in. But you do plan to have Adam bitten, right?

Paul

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For sure.

And here's my outline plan...

Adam 4.0 (almost done) will end with him leaving the mat ward to go get blood.

Herrick 1.0 will be her begi

Adam 5.0 - will be Adam goes down to the blood bank with only a scalpel to retrieve blood bags for Stacie, is chased, almost killed, but makes it back to the ER.

Oasis 4.0 - short, Oasis pissed, trying to figure out how to kill an adult.

Adam 6.0 - Adam returns to the ward with the blood and Herrick gets Stacie hooked up, but she starts to feel bad and leaves (they haven't seen these things turn so they don't know what the symptoms mean. Adam starts to comfort his wife and take care of his newborn daughter when Oasis shows up. Minister vs. 8-year-old dracula girl...can't wait to write this scene. Just as O is getting ready to overpower him, Clay arrives. (but Adam is bitten). I think Herrick can show back up after this at some point after clay arrives for a big scare.

Blake

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Very cool. Is Stacy going to make it? If not, I have uses for that blood.

Paul

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Not sure yet...my thought is she's touch-and-go as Clay and Adam roll her and the baby out of the maternity ward and they go in search of a way to get on the roof. But Adam is bringing back tons of blood bags. He's going to use them like grenades.

Blake

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Sounds awesome. But don't have Adam bitten until he's on the roof.

Joe

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Are elevators working?

Blake

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No elevators. Are you thinking Adam has a cart for the blood?

Joe

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How about this for Randall, since the outlines thus far don't really address what's going to happen with the kids in pediatrics.

He reaches pediatrics just as Be

They need to get the kids out. With Randall in the front, carving up every dracula that comes at them, and Je

They make it outside the hospital. There's a news van out there. Randall gets the kids into the back of the van...but Je

Jeff

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No, just wanted to know what options he's got. Nurse Herrick just gave him the most convoluted directions to the blood bank in history. Of course, it's in the basement. I'm actually afraid for him.

Blake

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@ Jeff - That works for me. Or they can meet with Clay and Adam in the hall and all go up together. If Je

@ Blake - Is Adam going to kill Oasis? Or will he balk at killing a child? Also, Adam will have an overnight bag for the hospital stay. He can fill a wheeled suitcase with blood packs.

Joe

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Adam 4.0 up...may need to do an accuracy polish later on what's happening with Stacie medically.

Blake

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You can give Adam an iPad, which he reads the bible on. That could be his light. Or just a regular book light, for late night gospel reading. He'll need something in the basement.

Joe

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Joe, cool. Je

Jeff

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Herrick 1.0 is up...on to Adam's journey into the basement.

Blake

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I did a quick draft of this to get it out of my system.

When Adam pulls the trigger, it would be nice to have a POV character see the windows blow out from the parking lot.

Paul

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I'll read it right now. Oasis 4.0 is up...short scene in the maternity ward.

Blake

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Paul, that's beautiful. I can see this all coming together now. There will be a touching scene between Adam and Stacie right before Randall takes Stacie and the baby up to the roof. She'll be back into consciousness, holding their daughter, blood flowing into her, and Adam is leaving them, infected, to go with Randall to kill these monsters. I fucking LOVE this.

Blake

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I head Adam on the roof: "I can't turn into one of these abominations. I won't!"

Clay: "That can be arranged."

Paul

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That was I hear Adam...

Sheesh

Paul

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I think this is the first time I'm really catching a glimpse of how this thing is going to wrap up, of seeing the sum of the parts, and it's truly exciting. Go