Draculas

Blake

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Paul's dispatching of Oasis...I think we have a wi

Blake

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Sounds good. I'll be able to upload much chainsaw mayhem tomorrow.

Jeff

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Don't ask me where that came from...I don't want to know. Really.

Paul

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Here's an expansion, plus some tweaks that take into account timelines, etc. of what Joe passed around earlier today. I also put this in the dropbox. Thoughts? We okay with this?

GUIDE TO WRITING THE END -- a lot of these are short short scenes, and I've broken it out like this to help me assemble it all in the end.

PAUL: Kickass scene where Clay saves Adam, Stacie and baby and gets them heading up toward the roof -- already written.

JEFF: Randall going up the stairs, protecting the kids. They're walking up four flights. Randall will take the rear, keeping the draculas back. They approach the roof, but don't get there yet in this scene...Randall loses one of his teeth.

BLAKE: Stacie, Adam, baby and Clay arrive on the roof. Randall and Je

JOE: Je

JEFF: Randall's transformation. Draculas break through, and as a full blooded dracula, with a chainsaw, he kills a few dozen.

BLAKE: Adam is attacked in the chaos while he's mourning over Stacie, Adam gets bitten trying to protect her body, Randall chainsaws another dracula and saves Adam from being torn apart.

PAUL: While that's happening, Clay is helping to load the four boys onto the chopper, still holding Adam's daughter, Daniella. The first wave of Draculas have been killed, a moment of quiet on the roof.

BLAKE: Adam knows what being bitten means. He goes to Clay, takes his daughter, says goodbye, then gives them to the TV people. Asks Clay for his gun, wanting to kill as many of the draculas as possible, and then kill himself before he turns. Clay says, "Actually, that can be arranged."

JOE: Randall is mortally wounded. Clay and Adam walk over, tell Je

PAUL: Clay and Adam setting the bombs as already written and Adam's death scene as it all goes up (from his detonation)

JOE: Last scene with Je

PAUL: Scene with Sha

JOE: Super short, like two or three sentence scene where Je

PAUL: Clayton fuckin' Theel's death. Goes back down for his Tauras, instead of ru

PAUL: We see the hospital blow from Sha

six hours later - dawn

SHANNA: the hospital a smoking pile of rubble...Sha

Blake

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Nice work, Blake.

I like everything, but I'm still not sure why Clay has to die. I still like a final scene where he crawls out of the rubble, his Taurus in his hand.

Or at least make it ambiguous if he died or not, so we could use him again if needed.

Everything else I'm 100% with.

Joe

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I think you've got a point...Clayton might be my favorite character of the bunch. A helluvalotta fun. Paul, how strongly do you feel about killing him?

Blake

September 17, 2010

I like the symmetry of him dying with his beloved Taurus. But we can sort of have that cake and eat it too with a coda showing one of those search dogs sniffing out a survivor in the rubble who manages to say he's deputy Clayton R. Theel.

Paul

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As they start to pull the rubble off him, he hands them the Taurus. "Here. Take her first."

Paul

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That's a problem we need to address. Even though we came at them independently, the couple dynamics of both relationships are too similar. We need to change that. The couple scenes strike me as repetitious.

Sha

Randall and Je

Je

So in other words, Randall and Je

Won't take much - a little shading of the dialogue, a few extra lines of internal monologue here and there. I'm willing to go in and make the two couples more distinct.

Paul

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Clay: "I might have a way to make it really count."

Paul

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I noticed that too, Paul. The fu

My original "fix" was to at once point have Je