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Here's what Blake and I have been thinking:
Je
Randall deals with Be
Clay and Sha
Clay, on his way to Je
They do save Je
They're chased to the roof. Clay is down to his last few rounds. Randall becomes a dracula. But his love for Je
Clay can either die heroically, or else get off the roof and wind up with Sha
Adam dies heroically, but gets his wife and child into the TV helicopter, which lands on the helipad on the roof.
The army arrives. Je
A young, bloody man survives. He's Mortimer, who changed back into something resembling a human--the real Count Dracula who is now going to turn the world. This is a reverse Night of the Living Dead ending. Rather than the rescuers killing the hero, the rescuers save the villain.
I want the media and the army to come. There's no need to keep them at bay. The secluded area, and the local cops dead, mean it will take some time for the army to show up.
We've only got about 3000 words each to write with our characters, then the slam bang ending where we can divvy up the final scenes.
How does that sound?
Joe
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I'm okay with this, and I do like the finale happening on the hospital roof...Paul does this address your concerns with the isolation, which I also had from the begi
Blake
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Here's what Blake and I have been thinking:
Je
Okay, I'll have to rewrite the stairwell scene. I can have C & S forced upstairs by the draculas and bump into Randall and the kid. (Speaking of the kid, it would be cool to have her transform into a dracula while she's on Randall's back. He notices these little teeth dropping on his shoulder...)
Randall deals with Be
Clay and Sha
Okay. I'll have him pull out his MM-1 semi-auto grenade launcher (a la Dogs of War) loaded with 40mm buckshot rounds instead of grenades, and go back in.
Clay, on his way to Je
Okay.
They do save Je
They're chased to the roof. (Can we put this off?)
Clay is down to his last few rounds. Randall becomes a dracula. But his love for Je
Clay can either die heroically, or else get off the roof and wind up with Sha
for a happy ending.
We don't need no stinking happy ending. A wounded Clay will die creating an explosive diversion for Je
Adam dies heroically, but gets his wife and child into the TV helicopter, which lands on the helipad on the roof.
The army arrives. Je
A young, bloody man survives. He's Mortimer, who changed back into something resembling a human--the real Count Dracula who is now going to turn the world. This is a reverse Night of the Living Dead ending. Rather than the rescuers killing the hero, the rescuers save the villain.
I want the media and the army to come. There's no need to keep them at bay. The secluded area, and the local cops dead, mean it will take some time for the army to show up.
Paul
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The media, etc. showing up is what I'd expect, so that alleviates my believability concerns.
Looks like Sha
Paul
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Nice! I love it...just a thought, What if both Stacie and Adam die, but a young man offers to save their baby at the end, and they let him. We of course, are interested and instantly sympathetic with this guy, and only in the last sentence/paragraph of the book, do we realize the young man is Mort, walking out of the hospital with a baby in his arms, a protege who will help him conquer the world.
Blake
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If you need to kill Clay, I understand. But he's probably the most fun character in the book. I wouldn't be adverse to having him live. Or maybe doing the classic: He's probably dead, Sha
Jeff and I have already discussed Je
I love the idea of the kid becoming a dracula on Randall's back.
Joe
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I'm not adverse to Clay living, but I had such a neat death idea: He's got 2 high explosive 40mm grenades. They're designed not to explode within 90 feet of the launcher. He can modify that. I see him wounded, bleeding, luring a whole bunch of draculas into some sort of enclosed area and detonating both, turning himself and them into meat confetti.
Paul
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First of all, "Meat Confetti" needs to be the name of a thrash metal band.
If Adam is mortally wounded, Clay could teach Adam how to set them off. Being a man of God, Adam would rather die than become an unholy abomination like Randall had become. And let's say his wife also died. So Clay could give him a lesson, then do a dramatic escape with the baby.
Then when Clay makes it to safety, he (inadvertently) hands the baby off to Mortimer, who is now a young man (and flirting with Sha
Joe
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I LIKE IT!