Draculas

But that doesn't mean you can't do one as well. Or that Sha

When he gets back from his drunken camping weekend, you two can merge the scenes.

Joe

August 28, 2010

I ended my last section with the power going out...but it seems like it'll be insanely difficult for all of us to work this element into our individual sections and keep the timeline consistent. Perhaps we should save that for the finale, where the characters all come together?

Jeff

August 29, 2010

Read your sections, Jeff. Awesome. I'm fine with the lights going out then. I can time it to coincide with you. Make sure Randall has a flashlight on his belt.

I'm almost finished with the section where Randall takes off after the girl. She went to look for her mommy. You might want to fix the ending of JEFF 2.0. Randall can still see Mort run past, and maybe even want to go after him, thinking that he'll kill him and all the others will die, just like you've written it. Except have Je

Then, when the lights go out, Randall can figure it's Mort who did it. And he's right--Blake and I will write a Mort POV scene where he takes out the generator. So Randall will go looking for the generator to get it started again.

Does that work for you?

Joe

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"Is that...a flamingo?" asked the old woman.

You are a sick, sick man, Joe Konrath.

Paul

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<i>This had a gun show beat to shit.</i>

Just read your scenes, Paul. Awesome. Laughed at the Dirty Harry line. Clay kicks ass.

I fixed a few small typos. At the end of the Sha

Your Sheriff $$--why not name him after one of your other characters from the RJ series? Maybe a brother or father of someone who died. Be cool if this tied in to your other books in a minor way.

Joe

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A few quickie notes.

We're at 30k words already, and everyone is writing standout scenes. I'm happy to be working with you guys.

We're at a point where global things are happening that we all need to address in our scenes.

1. There's gunfire, thanks to Clay. It will be heard throughout the hospital, so make sure your POV characters address it.

2. Clay used the intercom. This is something that can also be addressed. I'm going to have Je

3. The electricity goes out, and will remain out until Randall fixes it. Dr. Lanz is the one who did it. We should all be in the dark while writing our 4.0 scenes.

Paul, your Sha

Blake, you can go dark right about where your scene left off.

I believe overlapping timeframes is the best way to do this. Readers will be able to pick up that this is all happening at once, and by using cues such as the gunshots and the intercom a

So far, I see zero difficulty in piecing this together seamlessly. We might need to juggle a scene or two, but it's going to mesh very well.

Joe

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Sha

Lanz kills the power...anyone know how to make that work? There's gotta be a backup generator. He could destroy that first, then go after the main. But total darkness -- uh-uh. All hospitals have battery-operated emergency lights in all the hallways. I don't see how we can have total darkness, folks, but we can have loooong, deeeeep shadows from which friends and foes can spring.

Randall and Clay need to bump skulls at some point.

Lanz has to go after Je

This is proving to be fun.

BTW, I've passed the 10k mark and have miles to go before I sleep.

Paul

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I like Sha

The lights out will mean the generator will kick on, which will supply power to essential hospital equipment and utilities, but the lights will be dimmer (emergency boxes only above doorways) and the intercom will be out.

I dug the Je

Joe

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We can tag-team it. Fun.

Paul

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All - I'm back in civilization, and can't wait to read everyone's parts...Paul - feel free to do the chapel scene, I wasn't seeing a way to work it out in my scene...a question about the hospital power going out...are we going completely dark? No backup lights...having to use flashlights or glo-sticks only? Let me know.

Blake

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Also, I'm writing a Lanz POV scene to take him up to pediatrics, and show he seems to be smarter than the rest of the draculas. Possibly because he ingested the infection rather than got bitten.

Paul, aren't there some diseases that can be more severe based on the method of infection? My mind is blanking. But I'm pretty sure there are some bugs that are worse if you ingest them, as oppose to inhale them, or something...

Joe

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Up to speed finally on everyone's sections, and damn, boys! Really happy with how this is shaping up. Love Randall and Tina dynamic. Clay going through the hospital with his big guns is just plain badass, and Joe, we knew this already, but something is seriously wrong with you..."is that a flamingo?" OMG. Bravo, gents!

Blake

August 30, 2010

I wasn't happy with her immediate gonzetta transformation, so I toned it down.

Paul

August 31, 2010

JCPL had a fire somewhere yesterday afternoon that left much of this area of the Shore without power. (I was reading by flashlight last night.) But we're back now.

Paul

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Doesn't sound too hard...

http://news.yahoo.com/s/ap/20100827/ap_on_fe_st/us_odd_snake_hospital_outage

Paul

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I've made it so Lanz has more of his mental faculties than most of the draculas, due to ingesting the blood rather than being bitten. It's in the JOE folder, LANZ_2.0.

But it occurred to me that Be

When Randall tussles with Be

Or not. Just spitballing. But hospitals are filled with drugs, and Je

Joe

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The Be

SSRIs take weeks to work, while benzodiazepines (Valium, ativan, xanax) can kick in in 20-30 minutes -- quicker if injected. Could have some mellow draculas.